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Reviews for Dark Arts - Sinful PleasuresBy : SHIEN |
- From chilepepper on May 16, 2011
Inhaltlich gefällt mir die Story sehr gut.
Nur die Umsetzung ist nicht optimal. Die Groß- und Kleinschreibung und der Satzbau sind gewöhnungsbedürftig. Zum Teil sind die Wörter auch falsch gewählt. Dadurch ist die Story sehr anstrengend zu lesen. Doch was am meisten stört ist die Erzählform, die verschiedenen Perspektiven der Charaktere. Doch Dialoge sind ein ineinander greifendes Gespräch. Man weiß erst spät um wem es ich handelt und beim Wechsel der Charaktere sind die Beantwortungen auf die Frage schwer nachzuvollziehen. Zudem ist - meiner Meinung nach - der Text zu lang und das Schriftformat (txt-Format von animexx) ungünstig gewählt.
Ich hoffe, du schreibst weiter an dieser Geschichte. Wie bereits gesagt, inhaltlich ist es sehr spannend. Etwas Neues und daher (für mich) auch besonders, weil ich die Schwarzmagier mag, von großem Interesse.
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